I'm sure it was hard, but it absolutely paid off! The chapter is fantastic. Excited to keep reading! And can't wait for chapter 2
And on separate note... If you'd ever appreciate more detailed reader feedback as the story continues, I'd happy to give you a DM to learn more on specific areas you had like me to focus on...
I really appreciated how grounded this chapter felt. The domestic details, the coffee ritual, the family prayer, waking the girls gave real weight to the moment when responsibility arrives. The line “Sometimes calling comes looking for you instead of the other way around” especially stayed with me. Subscribed and eager for Chapter Two.
Sounds like Mason makes a great cup of coffee!
Thanks for sharing this. This is inspiring me to get my rough draft a little cleaner so I can share it.
I'm sure it was hard, but it absolutely paid off! The chapter is fantastic. Excited to keep reading! And can't wait for chapter 2
And on separate note... If you'd ever appreciate more detailed reader feedback as the story continues, I'd happy to give you a DM to learn more on specific areas you had like me to focus on...
Appreciate this so much
I really appreciated how grounded this chapter felt. The domestic details, the coffee ritual, the family prayer, waking the girls gave real weight to the moment when responsibility arrives. The line “Sometimes calling comes looking for you instead of the other way around” especially stayed with me. Subscribed and eager for Chapter Two.
This means a ton… it was hard for me to post this even more than my normal posts. I subscribed back and looking forward to your journey